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Yours, and Not Mine by ~Echoeslegend:iconEchoeslegend:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




It would make me smile, when you drove too fast.
Air streaming in,
and starlight in
early twilight. Out the sunroof
I would look because the road ahead
was just too much.

Maybe I hurt, when the phone was quiet.
And doorbells
rang no bells.
Inside, or out
the door I never wanted to run from you
or your bloodshot blues.

Craving everything, when one thing would do.
Your addictions
and convictions.
Too harsh, and
eclipsed were my only claims
that I did love you.
©2005-2008 ~Echoeslegend
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Submitted: August 11, 2005
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Date Picture Taken: Dec 26, 2004, 8:37:59 PM

Author's Comments

This is pretty rough, but not so rough I'd put it in scraps. Please though, tear it to pieces. Nevermind that I've been out of the game for some time. Criticism is highly encouraged and appreciated.

(As to the content of the poem? If I had something misleading to say now I guess would be the time to do it. Ah well. Also, I'm usually more of an imagery person, so I don't know how effective this blatant story aspect is.)

Enjoy, I hope.

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